Sometimes everything has to be enscribed across the heavens so you can find the one line already written inside you. Sometimes it takes a great sky to find that small, bright, and indescribable wedge of freedom in your own heart. David Whyte

Writing 201: Poetry – Elegy – The # 6 Bus

on February 20, 2015

I travel back, close my eyes, see you dimly
Pumpkin awaiting, mice all in harness.
You carried me dashing to the dance of a lifetime
Where I was transformed, but not by a prince.

Though tears mist my memories I’ll never forget you.
You showed me a city of people and places
That changed me forever, filled me with adventure.
That person enduring still dreams within me.

In beaming sunshine of nowadays I see us.
I moved away and travel a new route.
You haven’t changed much. I’d know you anywhere
Chicago Transportation, the #6 bus.

24 responses to “Writing 201: Poetry – Elegy – The # 6 Bus

  1. This is really quite lovely and moving.

  2. Your poem made me smile. Good job!

  3. Silver Threading says:

    Viva, this poem is excellent! Well done. I love the #6 bus!!!

  4. Saurabh Shukla says:

    This is so much fun! I’m jealous!

  5. gridthusto says:

    This is terrific! I really enjoyed reading this poem. Well done.

  6. That was soothing!
    Very nice and touching:)

  7. This is a fabulous poem! I love the line, “You carried me dashing to the dance of a lifetime.”

  8. vivachange77 says:

    Thanks Michelle. Funny thing about the word dashing – after I wrote it I realized it goes with Santa Clause’s reindeer. I decided that it is within bounds of my metaphor. Writing poetry has surprises. ❤

  9. Interesting idea with this one. I really liked “You showed me a city of people and places.” ❤

  10. I of July says:

    you’re too good… i’m envious 🙂

  11. vivachange77 says:

    Thanks for reading my poetry. I’m glad you like it. 🙂

  12. Wow I was with you all the way then suddenly ‘ I would know you anywhere’ alerted me away from the subjective way I was reading the poem and that bus appeared and caused me to question the reality of my personal interpretation , what a wonderful way to surprise the reader so interesting and artistic to introduce the inanimate as the cause of such passionate lovely memories makes me question the difference ha ha , Kathy.

    • vivachange77 says:

      Thanks for your enlightening response. I would love to hear where your reading took you. I never thought of the ending being sharply different because I was writing subjectively. I love the way we can take different meanings from poetry from both the writer’s and the reader’s point of view. Like my articles on Cuba, I could write a whole series on the # 6 bus.

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