Writing 201: Poetry – Elegy – The # 6 Bus

by poetrybyheart.me@poetrybyheart.me on February 20, 2015

I travel back, close my eyes, see you dimly
Pumpkin awaiting, mice all in harness.
You carried me dashing to the dance of a lifetime
Where I was transformed, but not by a prince.

Though tears mist my memories I’ll never forget you.
You showed me a city of people and places
That changed me forever, filled me with adventure.
That person enduring still dreams within me.

In beaming sunshine of nowadays I see us.
I moved away and travel a new route.
You haven’t changed much. I’d know you anywhere
Chicago Transportation, the #6 bus.

Posted in Poetry

Tags: Elegy, Poetry, Writing 201:Poetry

24 responses to “Writing 201: Poetry – Elegy – The # 6 Bus”

The Pickled Pastor says:

February 20, 2015 at 3:22 pm

This is really quite lovely and moving.

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 4:17 pm
  
  Thanks. I loved the diversity of the people on that bus.
  
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Udita Banerjee says:

February 20, 2015 at 3:38 pm

Nice one, I like the Cinderella reference
https://cupandchaucer.wordpress.com/2015/02/20/writing201-fog-elegy-metaphor/

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 4:13 pm
  
  Thanks.
  
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mariewilliams53 says:

February 20, 2015 at 3:43 pm

Your poem made me smile. Good job!

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 4:06 pm
  
  Thanks.
  
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Silver Threading says:

February 20, 2015 at 4:03 pm

Viva, this poem is excellent! Well done. I love the #6 bus!!!

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 4:09 pm
  
  Thanks. I could write lots of stories about the awesome things that I experienced on that bus. I regularly used my stories in sermons when I was still preaching.
  
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Saurabh Shukla says:

February 20, 2015 at 4:13 pm

This is so much fun! I’m jealous!

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 4:15 pm
  
  Thanks. Riding the #6 was an adventure. 🙂
  
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impossiblebebong says:

February 20, 2015 at 4:24 pm

Quite original.

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 5:17 pm
  
  Thanks.
  
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gridthusto says:

February 20, 2015 at 7:20 pm

This is terrific! I really enjoyed reading this poem. Well done.

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 20, 2015 at 11:26 pm
  
  Thanks for your enthusiasm. 🙂
  
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ShrutiInsights says:

February 21, 2015 at 3:50 am

That was soothing!
Very nice and touching:)

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 21, 2015 at 11:32 am
  
  Lovely comment. Thanks. 🙂
  
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MichelleWritesPoems says:

February 21, 2015 at 2:29 pm

This is a fabulous poem! I love the line, “You carried me dashing to the dance of a lifetime.”

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vivachange77 says:

February 21, 2015 at 2:50 pm

Thanks Michelle. Funny thing about the word dashing – after I wrote it I realized it goes with Santa Clause’s reindeer. I decided that it is within bounds of my metaphor. Writing poetry has surprises. ❤

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Susan Rowland says:

February 21, 2015 at 9:13 pm

Interesting idea with this one. I really liked “You showed me a city of people and places.” ❤

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  February 21, 2015 at 9:15 pm
  
  Thanks.I am ever grateful for my twenty years living in Chicago.
  
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I of July says:

February 26, 2015 at 9:02 am

you’re too good… i’m envious 🙂

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vivachange77 says:

February 26, 2015 at 11:46 am

Thanks for reading my poetry. I’m glad you like it. 🙂

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preciouspen1955 says:

March 1, 2015 at 1:37 am

Wow I was with you all the way then suddenly ‘ I would know you anywhere’ alerted me away from the subjective way I was reading the poem and that bus appeared and caused me to question the reality of my personal interpretation , what a wonderful way to surprise the reader so interesting and artistic to introduce the inanimate as the cause of such passionate lovely memories makes me question the difference ha ha , Kathy.

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- vivachange77 says:
  
  March 1, 2015 at 11:49 am
  
  Thanks for your enlightening response. I would love to hear where your reading took you. I never thought of the ending being sharply different because I was writing subjectively. I love the way we can take different meanings from poetry from both the writer’s and the reader’s point of view. Like my articles on Cuba, I could write a whole series on the # 6 bus.
  
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