Sometimes everything has to be enscribed across the heavens so you can find the one line already written inside you. Sometimes it takes a great sky to find that small, bright, and indescribable wedge of freedom in your own heart. David Whyte

Writing 201: Poetry – Concrete Poetry – Blue Bottle Fly

on February 19, 2015
                                              Like blue sky
                                               Above me
                                               My color
                                               Is bright.
                                             I'm a creature
                                           Who flies and who  
                                         Buzzes and hums until  
                                        People with swatters and
                                       Horse with a tail swats and
                                       Swish at me to little avail.
                                      I want to be seen as a gift of
                                     Sheer beauty. My wings shimmer
                                     And shine in the light. Now how
                                     Can they look at my iridescence
                                    And think me a nuisance and blight?

12 responses to “Writing 201: Poetry – Concrete Poetry – Blue Bottle Fly

  1. Silver Threading says:

    Good job! ❤

  2. What a unique viewpoint – I will feel bad the next time I swat one I think!

  3. Lily Lau says:

    Wow, you must be proud of this! I’m not able to create a good poem and even less to create it into a concrete shape!

    • vivachange77 says:

      I am proud that I could figure out how to make the poem keep its shape. I couldn’t at first. Then I read Ben’s instructions again and worked it out. Thanks for your comment. 🙂

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